This is a brilliant suspense story! The tension builds perfectly as Melanie’s paranoia escalates, leading her — and us — down a path of questions about her own mind and safety. The reveal about carbon dioxide poisoning is unexpected yet plausible, adding an eerie layer that’s grounded in reality. Ron’s concern and eventual support provide a warm, stabilizing influence, which rounds out the story beautifully.
Your use of sensory details, like the smell of burning toast or the creak of an old apartment, really pulls readers into Melanie’s deteriorating world. The way you weave in her fascination with true crime as a potential factor in her confusion is a clever touch, and the notes turning out to be her own under the effects of CO2 deprivation is the perfect twist.
The additional story teaser at the end for Trent’s story is intriguing too! It would draw readers into another layer of mystery. This story really nails the suspense while maintaining a sympathetic, relatable protagonist.
The duet of Iggy Pop’s fragile ballad, sung by Tina Turner and David Bowie, lights up the stage
Tina Turner had a remarkable year in 1984. After splitting from Ike Turner in July 1976, she built her solo career with the help of celebrity friends such as the Rolling Stones, for whom she opened during their 1981 US tour. She also appeared as a guest on a Chuck Berry television show in 1982. Her cover of Al Green’s “Let’s Stay Together”, released in November 1983, became an unexpected international hit.
Following the success of this single, Capitol Records gave the green light for a new album. Private Dancer was released in May 1984 and recorded in just two weeks. The album peaked at number 3 on the Billboard 200 and reached number 2 in the UK. The single “What’s Love Got to Do with It” became Turner’s only song to top the US Billboard Hot 100, with other hits such as “Private Dancer” and “Better Be Good to Me” following. In November 1984, she released “Tonight”, a duet with David Bowie from the Iggy Pop song.
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